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Friday, 10 February 2017

All About Me

All about me
Hi my name is Winnie and i’m 11 year old
I’m a Tongan and i’m a year seven, I have two
More year before i go to college My teacher’s
Name is Miss stone (she is nice and cool
And i’m like to have a teacher like that)
I got two sister my sister who died her
Name was Elizabeth  and the other one
Is Ana but her real name is Nia.


My brother is Mafoa this year he
Went to college Last year he was
About to go to college now he is
In college next it is me When i go
to college it will be the last year



BY WINNIE :)

6 comments:

  1. hey Winnie im Sara from Blaketown school I liked how you used lots of colours and how you wrote it. but maybe next time you could re read it
    bye

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  2. Hey Winnie I am Aimee from Blaketown school. I like the way you used lots of colors and how you put your work together. But maybe next time you should reread your work and check if it makes sense. see ya

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  3. Hey Winnie I am Maddie from Blaketown School. love the colours and everything. Maybe next time reread you work but it's good
    Bye Maddie

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  4. Hi Winnie
    I love how you used bright colors, its makes it look more happy! In the second paragraph you seem to use collage a lot, maybe think of a different word and reread it. Other than that its fantastic.
    Bye, Jessica

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  5. Hi Winnie
    I love how you used bright colors, its makes it look more happy! In the second paragraph you seem to use collage a lot, maybe think of a different word and reread it. Other than that its fantastic.
    Bye, Jessica

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  6. Hi Winnie, my name is Satyn - Pearl and I’m from Kawakawa Primary School. I am in Rm 5 and my teacher is Mrs Cowles. I am a Year 6 and I’m 11 yrs old. I really like your all about me poem it is really colorful and you did well explaining about yourself. You never shared any personal information so that is good. I have no tips for you because it is perfect, feel free to check out my blog at any time :)
    http://kpssatync.blogspot.co.nz/

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